The Columbia Chronicle,
The Chronicle, our very own Columbia campus newspaper. I usually end up grabbing a copy of the Chronicle each week, even if it’s just to pass some time in between classes. The Chronicle is our student run newspaper that graces our buildings each week.
The Chronicle is very good at keeping up with current events that are happening in and around Columbia. If you are ever interested if knowing what’s going around Columbia the Chronicle is a good source for you to look at, as well as given with a student perspective.
There are basically four sections to the Chronicle, the campus news section, the arts and entertainment section, a review section, the commentary section and the city beat section. Within the campus news section you can find your hearing about not so in depth campus polls, I think it would be more interesting to hear what more than three people thought about a topic. You can also read about debates on all different issues that have or will be happening, articles on Columbia students who have made big achievements in their careers or soon to be careers. This is the section of the paper where you will find many different issues pertaining to student issues on campus hence Campus News. The paper seems to do well with this section not every article can be of interest to everyone.
The arts and Entertainment section of the paper is by far the largest section containing lots of photographs and many articles derived from happenings in TV, film, and music, to local happenings and even articles with local artists who have shows or instillations that can bee seen. Or just have a story to tell.
The review section, well I guess I should have more to say about this section since well its what we are doing. But the fact is there isn’t much to this section, four categories print, movies/dvd/tv, music and random. It is here where they three picks for each category and give it a one to two sentence review and give it a rating of a smiley face. This also the section where you’ll find the horoscope, crossword and sudoku puzzles.
The Commentary section is where you will find many editorials and responses to stories this is also a very small section of the paper.
On to the City beat section of the paper, this is a pretty interesting part of the paper you’ll find many articles of different happenings in the entire city. This section might let you know about city political events or policies. Basically this section focuses on what’s going on and making news in Chicago.
Over all this newspaper is full of lots of good information from the articles to the advertisements given by the school or outside business. Everything here is directed for the student so pick it up maybe you’ll find something useful if not throw it in the recycling bin.
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Within the first paragraph, you could easily simplify your sentences by saying, "The Chronicle, our very own student-run campus newspaper." We know it is for our school already, so you can skip the sentence that says "is our student run newspaper that graces our buildings each week." Perhaps you can add weekly into the altered sentence as well.
Limit your use of "Columbia" if you can, particularly within the opening paragraph as it becomes redundent.
For the second paragraph, try to drop "basically" because there either ARE 4 sections, or there are NOT. Skip using "_____ section, ______ section"-- switch to something like, "the campus news, arts and enterainment, reviews, commentary, and city beat"-- either place section before those descriptions, or find a way to place it at the end.
Try re-wording, or re-writing this line: " Within the campus news section you can find your hearing about not so in depth campus polls" as it is worded in an odd way. Same with this part, " This is the section of the paper where you will find many different issues pertaining to student issues on campus hence Campus News." This sentence seems fragmented or incomplete: "The paper seems to do well with this section not every article can be of interest to everyone."
Odd sentences: "The review section, well I guess I should have more to say about this section since well its what we are doing. But the fact is there isn’t much to this section, four categories print, movies/dvd/tv, music and random." Consider re-writing, and in my opinion, avoid mentioning the class in the reviews, as I don't think we should be treating them as though it were only to be read by our classmates.
I know this is touching upon a lot of grammatical issues, but in many ways that is one of the most important aspects of a review because it should be easily understood and relatively easy to follow.
More than anything, work on editing-- try reading the review out loud in order to check if things A. Make sense, and B. Sound correct. A lot of things appear to be thrown into the scheme, without any thought on their purpose, or the reason as to why they are placed in a specific section-- this made the piece difficult to follow or gain interest in.
I would have liked to have seen more of your opinon throughout, rather than the little bit you put into the conclusion. I wasn't sure where you stood on the Chronicle.
I hope this helps, good luck reviewing!
I'm going to be a little picky.
In the first 2 paragraph you use Columbia and Chronicle a lot, which is good for a reader who has no idea what you are talking about, but for me a little repetative.
3rd paragraph: "There are basically four sections", the basically part is what bothers me, " There are basically four sections" or there "is"...just flat out say it and then break it down, I like the break down of the sections by the way.
"The review section, well I guess I should have more to say about this section since well its what we are doing."-the word "well" through me off, it can be taken out and no one would miss it.
Put more of your opinion in there, don't worry about others and what they will like, it is about whether you liked it or not.
*Precise Description
*Complete Information
I told you I was going to be picky, keep up the good work. It was a good review and for the record I think I am going to go pick up a Chronicle when I see one.
I really feel like their is no opinion here, at all. I read the Chronicle, so I know what it is, but you basically just spent the entire time summarizing what's in there. That's not really helpful. What you wrote would be informative for somebody that doesn't go to Columbia, but since we all do, we don't necessarily need the information. Your first paragraph, I'll have to agree with Michelle, could have been shortened to maybe even just one sentence. It seemed like you repeated one sentence five times and called it a day. Work on precision in your language, otherwise people are just going to skip over large chunks of your review. Like I said before, there's really no opinion here. I don't know if you're afraid to offend, or what, but there's not even really anything good. I have no idea if you care about the Chronicle at all.
You were very thorough in your information, I have to say. That's a negative and a positive for this, as you were so thorough you basically forgot everything else. However, somebody reading this from another school or from out of school will get a very good general idea of what the Chronicle is about.
Overall, work on putting an opinion into this review. That's where the fun comes in- in learning people's individual opinions. One person could read the Chronicle and despise it, while another can love it, and that's what makes the world go round.
Okay... first of all you did an excellent job of describing what the Columbia article is and what it consist of. I feel it was fine that you broke down each section of the article but after that you had no opinion what so ever about the Chronicle. I would have liked to see what you might have thought about each section or even once section of the newpaper that catches your eye more. Even a section that you really enjoy reading. Take more time to focus on your like's and dislikes instead of just having a whole review of description beacuse no one is really interested in that.
Hey Greg, you've already had your grammar picked apart here, so I'll just second that. This is a passable description of the paper, but what you really think about it (and why) never really shows up. Wouldn't you rather write something more interesting than this?
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